The problem is, my opening sucks. It doesn’t just suck, it Hoovers, it Eurekas, it makes the 8-pound Oreck XL look like an eyedropper. I’m talking about Washed in the Blood, of course, the cureent albatross hanging around my neck and stinking up the place.
I think I need to show some of the family dynamics going on between John, Maggie, Deborah, and Alyssa before all Hell breaks loose. I also need to get Thomas into the picture and give him a reason to be there. There are several other things going on that kind of have an impact on the story as a whole.
The problem is that nothing really happens in the opening scene. I get all of the above into it, but it’s really just a tea party with a strong undercurrent of tension and impending danger. Not a good selling point.
I have a couple of options. The two leading contenders at this point are:
1.) Open in the middle of the aforemention Hell breaking loose. This would then require an almost chapter-long flashback to get the aforementioned family dynamics explained, etc. I hate flashbacks. Hate, Hate, HATE!!!
2.) Create a red-shirt and feed him to the monster. If I can do this one right, I might be able to show Thomas as a monster right off the bat (so to speak, heh). Then would follw the tea party, shortly followed by Hell breaking loose. I still don’t like this option. It seems pretty bogus, especially since I already have a couple of red-shirts along the way.
At this point, I’m pretty well stuck. I can’t say I’ll fix it on the rewrite, becuase this IS the rewrite.
My brain hurts. I guess I’ll bang my head on the keyboard for a little while like the little guy on tamboblog.